Monday, November 18, 2013

A small footstep


Out in the cold moonless night with not even a star to jolt a tiny beam of hope, she stepped on to the highest stone of the building. She saw her life tumbling down as if it were made of cards. She could see her long awaited future closing down on her. Feeling lost and having no clue where to turn for comfort she stood rooted to the ground.

She saw the glam of the city below her. People walking as fast as their legs could take and ignoring the rest of the world. No one stopped to acknowledge others. They were in a hurry to live their life as if it was their last day. Are we all like this? Chasing the future, neglecting the present and forgetting the past? She wondered.

Every thoughts were pondering in her head and making her sick. She wanted to step down. She knew, you can't get away from yourself by moving from one place to another. She was very much aware of that cos that's what she was doing for long. And that's when she finally decided to stop moving and to take the final leap. A journey away from her loved ones and without any painful tomorrows. With all the muffled thoughts and memories she took a small step forward, into the darkness, as if it was her first but was supposed to be her last.





I chose the quote  “You can’t get away from yourself by moving from one place to another.”  (The Sun Also Rises)





42 comments :

  1. Sometime people makes certain choice in life because sometime people feel too weak at that point of time .. May god give strength too every one of us to at least fight from our self at that point of time !

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  2. u hv captured teh hots of the sucidal person well! Scary thou

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    1. Thanks Dear :)

      When you are seeing your last moment in front you it's scary na?

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  3. Wow, that was quite some narration. Nice take on the prompt.

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  4. It is very depressing to see the life one dreamt of or hoped to live cease to exist. At times it can drive one to take such extreme measures.. A sad tale.. but well written..

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    1. Thanks Vaisakh. :)

      When life long dreams and aims just gets goes off the wrong direction one tends to take depressing decisions.

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  5. Was she contemplating suicide? The prompt is weaved well into this piece.

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  6. at some point of time... I think we all take this leap of faith.
    lil courage, lil fear... that's it :)

    Nice read !!

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    1. Very true. Thanks for reading and commenting Jyoti. :)

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  7. Letting urself go is important not where life ends but begins

    PhenoMenon

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  8. This made me think about how one's life flashes before one's eyes when the time comes. Wow. Well written!

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  9. Well written and fabulous take on the prompt...
    It takes just a little bit of courage and a good dose of common sense to keep going when times are tough and dreams are shattered.

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    1. Thank you :)

      A bit of support from dear ones could also make us move forward....

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  10. I could not get the context, but from others' comments it looks like suicide.

    You changed the url of your blog. Once in a week or so, I tried sheethalsusan89.blogspot and got nowhere.

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    1. Yeah I was trying to portrait that.

      Oops... sorry for that. I did change it.. and that was a moment's decision.

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  11. Brilliantly written and so sad. You allowed us into your character's head and I liked that a lot.

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  12. nice take on the prompt but depressing . You have put forward her views in a favourable way but suicide is not ........................

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  13. Last line is very depressing and still I loved the way you have written it... very softly expressed..

    Richa

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  14. Though sad for the protagonist but liked your very different take on the prompt! Good going, Sheethal :)

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  15. sometimes darkness is more comforting than the brightness

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    1. I whole heartily agree to that.

      Thanks for visiting :)

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  16. sometimes darkness is more comforting than the brightness

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  17. sometimes darkness is more comforting than the brightness

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  18. aha! suicidal.. choices people make, to their their own.. very well articulated Sheetal.. the mind workings of the she.. wish she had stopped running, stayed put and led a life and not taken a step into the darkness! again choices :)

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  20. I kinda didnt like it as it gave a vivid picture :( but u penned it well

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  21. Very well written Sheethal. Creeped me out actually. :(

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  22. Very poignant, Sheethal. And very sad.

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